I liked this... :B
And, thank you very much for your review on Paradise. If you want, you're welcome to look at more of my work... ^.^

very interesting. keep writing and i can't wait to read more.

Haha, that was ** up, but very funny! The one where you mentioned about Lot being Abraham's nephew, not brother....is it possible that I had anything to do with it?

You know, I just got an idea. While I'm reading this strange and unusual story, I figured that if it were ever made into a movie, it should be something like "Fight Club." That movie was ** up too, so it's perfect! Get Dave Fincher to direct, and you're golden.

This is one crazy ride, D. I had, at first, put off reading it, but, upon checking it our more fully, am starting to like it.

Hey,

I really think this story is good. I think Abraham is a cool character in the story.But I do like the plot and idea of the story.

Hey,

You got a good story goin on here.Keep it up. I hate to ask. But could you review a fe chapters of my story The Sient. Sorry to ask. But I did like your story so far.

An interesting character, this Melchizedek. I like the Biblical history and references, though I always thought Lot was Abram's nephew, not brother. Anyway, another good, but short, effort. Keep 'em coming, Deacon!

I smell potential. In my opinion it's an awesome story! You MUST write more.

I smell potential. In my opinion it's an awesome story! You MUST write more.

Finally, this story has been updated, Deacon! When you named the chapter "a few answers," you weren't kidding. A good bit of humor mixed into this chapter as well, I like how the deacon/Knight is so drunk he can't do anything. So Bishop isn't a vampire? That's a startling revelation...I'll have to wait and see what that's all about. The parallel between the Church and chess was clever, I'll admit....here's hoping you've gotten a creative burst and put out more chapters soon.

Wow, a really weird chapter, but good. That last scene at the end, with everbody having a beer....was the deacon really tripping or something? Aptly named chapter.

It's great that you continued this story, Deacon. The ancient origin of the protagonist was fascinating...I had a similar idea to explain one of my character's origin later on, but looks like you beat me to the punch. Also in this chapter, the vision of the two wraiths in the field was wonderfully told. Keep it up!

Awsome story. Could you review my story The Evil Pumpkin Man

Okay, that was a little...bizzar, but still interesting. It's great to see an update, finally, and I plan on sticking with this story as long as you continue it--which I hope becomes a little more frequent--and look forward to seeing where you go with it.

Good story , very good writing style ... You got it !