O_O. Wow. This was amazing. Good job! ...Wow. Heh.

This is more like a story than poem but i like it, "I would rip your bleeding heart out and spit it up0on the cold earth" was my favorite part. Good job.

Crepy...yet cool.

I like this, there are some really good phrases in this poem. 'mild-mannered poison' - brilliant, and i love the way you address your victim 'little butterfly', all isolated in once sentence on it's own. The last section on arranging the body in a humble, pleading manner is great - puts a vivid picture in my mind of the scene.

I find your poem lacking in realism, I think maybe if you described the would-be murders with more vigour it would make for emotionally stimulating reading. There is an edge to your style, but I think maybe you need to develop it progressively. Other than that I was not surprised by the lovesick, got to get the man desperation