 old unhappy far-away things 2003-01-02 . chapter 1I love it, even though it's depressing. |
 De Miles Justus 2002-07-29 . chapter 1An interesting read, but...
What has any of this have to do with the concept of existentialism? I'm really having trouble spotting the underlying message
Existentialist's main concept: Existence precedes essence |
 Sir Brass of the Pen 2002-03-29 . chapter 1Whoa . . . talk about a good short story. Nicely done, nicely done. I caught a few MINOR spelling errors, but that doesn't really matter. Man, I can't believe this actually happened to somebody . . .
~Sir Brass |
 Silver11 2002-01-20 . chapter 1Oh dear, what a sad story. It was short, but good to read. The only suggestion I can give is to try to decieve the reader a little. Rather than type "some body" try "somebody." It conveys the notion that the speaker is expecting a person, not a corpse. I also think you could describe the sister a little more. Great job, but I hope you can write something a little happier soon. |
 lucia marin 2001-10-01 . chapter 1GAAAAAH! I am so jealous! ok, you've definitely passed me up on this one. an author recognizes an author in a split second, and that's what's going on here. thanx for asking me to read up on you, i'm loving it! keep writing more stuff like this.
luce |
 Renn Ireigh 2001-09-22 . chapter 1Oh my god. I'm knocked speechless. That was so great. You really shocked me at the end there- I was expecting something like the boy was being called to identify the body of one of his parents. I was never expecting a sister. You're very good at keeping people in suspense, and I think that your writing is wonderful. |
 raine6 2001-08-22 . chapter 1That was quite depressing, but you described everything very well and it was really emotional for such a short fic. I kinda had a feeling it was his sister since the man had asked if his parents were home first... still, very sad and it's even more sad that this happened to your friend. |
 Ken Tachinawa 2001-08-22 . chapter 1 Very depressing. It was very well written and pretty exiting for being so short. Pretty good for an original peice. |