I like the imagery you use; and how half of the poem is spaced, and the other half is in one paragraph. It conveys a sense of confusion that really takes hold of both the sense of sight and sound (when said outloud, of course). Anyway, this is very well written!

I like this,especially the first 3 lines.It reminds me of my own writing in a way,

and this is rated R why?

love the poem

Incredible! Remind me to tag this onto my favorites list!

Wow . . . that's all I can say . . .amazing. *disapears in a puff of smoke*