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| anomie 2004-12-14 ch 1, anon. | abuseI wondered what your take on self pity would be, from the outside or from the inside. In many nways you've caught both. There's something going on though; you've caught the narcissism of self-pity but there's plenty of condemnation of self-pity there too. It's great, I really like it. I'd have gone for less gentle metaphors: used tampons, cigarette butts and vestigial internal organs but then again I'd have written a crap poem, not a great one. -R (anomie) |
| God Called In Sick 2003-08-25 ch 1, | abuseawesome poem. exactly how i feel about everything. try to cheer up. i know it's hard but you still gotta try. great job again. |
| jewelz 2001-09-14 ch 1, anon. | abuseo dear. I feel sorry for whoever thinks they are only worthy of lining dog houses |
| Susan 2001-09-14 ch 1, anon. | abuseCheer up!- but some nice metaphors. hmm, nail varnish. |