very good.

nicely written as well

:)

i love it.

Hey .. cool story. The strange arrows just hav to be guns the gods of suffering could be money or war or something simmilar... im not sure about the gold fire or green fire tho. My guess might be that its something religious however.

I wrote a "indian myth" type of thing as well.. check it out if you want

Quite compelling. Nicely done.

Yow-zaa. I am awe-struck. I must dwell on this awesome fact.

That was very good. You obviously put a good deal of thought into it.

I like! So true! Tacooossss!

Cool you should write more myths like that you odviously have a lot of talent so use it with what your good at.(Did that make sense?)