Oh +claps+ that was beautifully done, and the ending just perfect. At the end i thought maybe you were doing the wizard of oz... (me and my obssessions-ne?) I hoped this is in time for your grading- i doubt it somehow, though i didn't check the date
Keep up the good work- Tarnished Oversoul

I'm probably late as per usual but here it is. I thought it was pretty good, you had some very nice description there. I didn't find anything wrong with the ending - it's kind of the ending you would expect for a very short story :) If I were an english teacher I would say I recommend that you get this markl but I'm not so...............good luck :)

Scary scary scary, but very good.
-Adi