that's a nice job! i really enjoyed reading it and can't even find parts to help you and advise you on! usually, I find one if not many things that could be better, and, try and suggest them, nicely, because that's the way I am! but hey, I can't find anything wrong with this one.
ps-if what you're writing about is true, try punching pillows and eating chocolate, cry to you're favourite depressing music, and wack some flowers! hehe

MMMMm good very good well written. i like this one it has what other poems have but with a little more. nice job ,ciao luv lia

another writer who can write disturbing poetry. My friend would freak out at this. It sounds like one of my demented poems. Keep writing.

caliko_cat

One good review deserves another. I'm glad you got my haiku joke and this poem is great. I'm going to read the rest now.

I can't tell you how familiar this is... I don't think I'd want to. Good show, tres tres bien.