Wow. I loved that, it's um.. disturbing. But awesome touches. (I'm new to this site... so I really don't know what to say!) Great.. sad prayer.

Amen.

It doesnt suck! dont be so misleading! hehe! its sad, i got a feeling of hopelessness from it. dunno if that was what you were trying to convey but i liked it anyway... -the Lady Elaine

damn that is the best parody of that prayer i've ever read its dark and disturbing but thats what makes it so good. wish i had the talent to write like that. and its not bad... i demand that u change the summery...um..but u don't have to. :D*Ana*

Just plain disturbing. Even for a parody.

This is very good. Very deep, dark and depressing. I really enjoyed reading this poem. Keep up all the wonderful work!

OMG! That is so sad! Wow, that just made me all depressed. It was really good. Keep up the good work!

Wow. Speechlessness.

In my honest opinion, I think that your summary described this poem wrongly-it's not bad at all. It's quality work that is really hard to find on fiction press. Consider yourself very gifted-I can't write poetry for crap!

it's a good poem. I've always like to read the different versions of lay me down to sleep.

Ali, this is Bear. That was one of the best poems I have read in a long long time(and I read a lot of poems!) D: Of course, the fact that I read it in my uber-spiffy voice helped! :)

B:Where did you get the idea for this poem? E-mail me with the answer or just for the hell of it. Thanks babe, yeah I know, I call all friends or friends of friends babe! D: :P Unfortunately.