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| Cobster 2004-03-24 ch 1,  | abuseGreat-I can almost hear the tune... I always wish I could just listen to the music whenever I read a song on here, it's so much better and it really lets me step inside the writer's soul and mind...it feels so deep like that. This is one of the better songs I've read, too. The message is something I can really relate to and it's also very clean cut. You don't make a mess of the words as you rhyme them. Overall a very good job. Love this song. Favorites list material. |
| A girl thats as scary as he... 2003-12-26 ch 1, anon. | abuseIt was moving. The points you made were subtle yet strong. |
| FamousOneLiners (too lazy t... 2003-09-06 ch 1, anon. | abusegreat stuff, i can imagine a beat in my head, and the words ring true |
| PunkGretchen 2003-05-30 ch 1, anon. | abuseSweetness. This is really good. If you haven't yet you should consider sending this to the Brian Deneke web site. Keep up the amazing work! Gretchen PS Thanks for reading and signing my story! |
| aleppine 2003-05-25 ch 1, | abuseNice name, and I don't know what the story behind it is (except that someone died), but it's a great piece of writing anyway. The informality of it works quite well. I liked the lines 'This isn't my war I'm fighting It's been yours, and that's what frightning' (great rhythm in that couplet) and 'In a few minutes you're gonna let me go.' Really great song. I'd like to imagine that there was an acoustic/light moment in this as a piece of music, though I could hear it as a heavier song in my head. |
| Voodoo Fyrefly 2003-05-08 ch 1, | abusegreat name, by the way XD now, onto the song. Like the way you've handled the story, the chorus is pretty anthemic. and the message in it...i like ~TIO |
| wingless 2002-12-15 ch 1, | abusegood rythm powerful lyrics you're a great writer |
| Wrong Name Tag 2002-11-05 ch 1, | abuseNicely written... would be very cool to hear... Awesome job -Jessie |
| Bienfoy 2002-11-01 ch 1, | abuseman this song absolutly rules!the kinda thing that'd go no.1 in about two seconds, you've got real talent! |
| shana 2002-01-27 ch 1, | abusecool song. so true. a mi me gusta |
| Sarah 2002-01-15 ch 1, anon. | abuseBeautiful. I love it. I'd like to hear that put to music. His death was such a tragedy... |
| QuinnyBarton 2001-12-26 ch 1, | abuseI adore this song! It's so awesome! We've gotta put it to music. It'll be on our first CD! |
| Rigil Paix 2001-10-11 ch 1, | abuse*shine* Interesting take on the issue. *shine* I rather liked it. *shine* |
| Shinitenshi01 2001-10-07 ch 1, anon. | abusego christine!! me likes it alot!! |
| cardboard tom 2001-10-07 ch 1, anon. | abuseI hate humanity. This is so true, and you are so right. That poor guy. Good song. |