This story doesn't evoke any emotion.We haven't really met Lauren, seen her mooning over Michael. We know nothing of their history, of her thoughts on him. Try lengthing it and being a bit more despcriptive. It has potential.

Oh god, this happened to me last week. Very well written, and I can completely comprehend what you're saying. Hope to read some more soon.

I liked it. It was sad and all but I think it could have been longer. It was nicely done overall though.

i liked it... and i think it's ok if a stories going to be short- but, as a suggestion, i think maybe the situation could be better explained- if you know what i mean- who's maria? are michael and lauren good friends? etc. etc.- other than that though, i really liked it...

Yep, its short. It's sad but a little too short to be too sad.
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Ugh.. can't think of anything to put here...

Bummah.

i didn't really like it... it was nicely done but the writing style fell into the soap opera genre....

Depressing.........