PS Who is Sally Campbell? This has to be the sixth or so time you've used her.

Very very cool.
Only for the love of all that is good and right change the last line. Maybe to: "Charles closed the door, walked into the living room and sat back down on the couch." Less impact, but more cool. Kind of a great unresolved thing. Like Charles had his chance and blew it. That was your theme I guess, and Charles dying is distracting.
The middle bit was just so stylee.

Ummmm...that was different.

Heartily enjoyable and quite good.

Uh, okay. What was this one all about, Deacon? I kind of get the feeling that you were reaching with this one, not too sure where you wanted to go with it, and then decided "what the heck, why go anywhere?". If I'm correct in my surmation, then the kicker was...that there really wasn't one?