Lovely...a good thought and a good setting. Will there be another chapter to explain the premonition? If so, drop me a line somehow when it's up or I'll just notice eventually. Very good.

I like the poem/song, especially considering it is a story-integrated song which are very difficult to write. A few things were awkward in the rest of the story...the dialogue is a tad unrealistic, but not bad. The story isn't told in good old storyteller fashion...perhaps it should be simpler, more informal, I don't know. The bit about different kinds of magic should be simpler, more concrete, more assuming that this is a fact of life not a new idea. Anyway, good job, hope to read more soon.

that was a really good story/poem! It had good detail. Please review me!

yeah, i didn't read it my dear...but being that it's by you, it has to be good. considering that i suck so much more then you at writting, but you know i'll read it eventually.

love ya!
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that was interesting