Hah. Some of it does make no sense at all. Whenever I write poetry, it usually comes out in jumbled up ideas...sorta' how this looks, no offense. I usually end up making two poems from it, or try to make a "poem story" thing.

Very bizzare, like you said...I like it )

I liked this poem! I read it mostly because you said you were inspired by Eliot and found myself drooling over your rhyimg. Honestly, it wasn't struley inventive or anything, but i loved "fingers" and "lingers" and "liars" and "desires" and they way they all sounded together. The line "As we wander in the evening,To the silent place of grieving..." soudns like something straight out of Eliot... very nice, indeed.

I simply love it. Just beautiful. Beautiful.

Angele Raye

very odd, its just my stlye! like like like.

this is sooo sweet. kind of a dark love poem and it does make sence when you look at it as a moment frozen in time and its just emotions that come to mind or something.

That's a goodun', hyuk! J/K. It was prettyful. And really...insightful.