 eden 2002-09-10 . chapter 1 Ooot, that's cool ^_^
Constructivre critism:
~Too many "currently"s in the first two paragraphs...
~some gramar/spelling errors, not too much (yay! Chiad uses spell check!)
~the last sentance is confusing. It should be in "..." even if it is a thought...
I love it though. It's really cool ^_^ |