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| Y 2004-02-26 ch 1, anon. | abusesublime. |
| Broken Angel 2003-12-01 ch 1, anon. | abuseOk, ive reviewed so many i cnt rememebr if ive already done this one or not. If i have, then sorry, but it deserves reviewing twice. If i havn't, then i dont know why! Amazing. I love all your writing, it's incredible. You use a range of different adjecives rather than, like so many people, using common and often dulled ones. You are such a sublime and beautiful writer. |
| scarred 2002-12-30 ch 1,  | abuseThat was really really good! How someone can be alive but feel dead. I love it. I don't know if I am getting whole different meanings from your poems then you are meaning to give, but either way your poems really mean something to me... I love them all. I just want to tell you that you are an amazing writer! I am sorry if all of my reviews are creeping you out or anything... It's just that I can't help myself. I have to tell you how amazing they are. |
| Ragdoll 2002-01-08 ch 1, | abuseHey.. sorry haven't been able to get on the net recently :( I hope you're ok.. This poem is just so detailed... It must have taken a while to write. I think it flows really well and the rhyme scheme is refreshing. Basically it's a great piece of writing! I can relate to the subject quite a bit. It reminds me a little of my Empty Shell poem but of course it's really different. I pray that you'll have the patience to wait out purgatory and the hope to see te light at the other end. love Tom |
| Bitterscarlet 2001-12-20 ch 1, | abuseI like the rhyming scheme of the first half. The second is also good but (Here's the 'constructive' bit) the transition between the two could be smoother. It suddenly drops in the third last stanza without warning. You could just swap those last two lines in that stanza and it would flow together |
| gasoline rainbows 2001-12-13 ch 1, | abuseI love your definition of Purgatory. Of all the pain the suffering, but at the same time the same tired plains. Of how our punishment might echo our past, and the claustrophibic (spelling?) feeling in the first stanza. Your rhyme scheme is something very original and adds to the feeling that we really don't know. I guess. Your last line is very powerful. |