Kewlness. Please take this as CONSTRUCTIVE critisism. I have a habit of reading a chapter and deciding wether or not to finish...i'm not finishing this one. I think your wording tends to be redundant or repetitive (i spell so well :) ). I feel like i have read this story a thousand times. I only have one question have you read "The Science of Vampires" your story reminds me of it (that's good.) If you feel like my opinion is wrong...send me a message or something and tell me why i should read it.
Chao,
Vampyr

Well well well:) Vamps can not specifiaclly fly but can stay very long in the air. I liked ur lil storie boy but u are as the same as the rest. ;)

Beautifully written! You have a way of captivating your readers, leaving them hanging on every word. Keep up the good work, you're very talented!

I really enjoyed it; it was extremely well-written. A gold star for you!

wow. just like Rice you leave me wondering and ready to search the world for Vampires. and i do intend on finding them one day.
~your restless soul
Raven

Interesting take on the whole idea of vampirism; the parasite concept is intriguing. Some of it sounds a little far-fetched (parasites become fertile every 28 days? Sounds familiar...), but for the most part it is original and creative. A question: if the parasites are interested in their own individual survival as you say they are ("Survival of the individual is its purpose, not survival of the species"), than why aren't vampires immortal?

Wow! I LOVE this! I had absolutely NO idea that this was here. I am a huge fan of Anne Rice, and your style reminds me very much of hers. The way you wrote it, it almosts makes me wonder if you really ARE a vampyre....I'm into supernatural things too, (especially Faeries...or fei whatever you'd like to call them.) One of my favorite vampire books are 'Bloodthirst' by L.A. Freed. Have you ever read it? It's simply WONDERFUl. I highly recommend it, if you haven't already read it. Anyways, you are a wonderful, and VERY discriptive writer, and I hope you update soon! ^^

WOW!! Dave what can i say?....This is so good you have gotta carry on with it!!

I expect chapter 5 soon!!!

Dani xx