Interesting...I can't quite decide what you're describing here, and I'm not particularly inclined to venture a guess for fear of embarrassing myself.

On the other hand, the wording is as lovely as always, and the rhythm is back to normal. You did a good job with this one, except for the fact that I'm not entirely sure I know what you're talking about. Perhaps you could make your point clearer?

Keep writing!

~Weeba~