Beautiful. Simple and lovely and breathtaking in its quiet, shattered misery. The use of the Japanese is very effective, and I love the image of "before they can scatter your life upon the wind". Beautiful.

I was wondering...this is my last review of the night, and I've been looking at your work, and I wanted to know if you could maybe take a look at some of my poetry, see what you think of it. You're such a good writer, and most of my reviewers have so little idea of what they're talking about, that I thought it would be nice to get some constructive criticism from an actual peer. If you have the time, I'd appreciate it. I understand if you don't.

Keep writing!

~Weeba~