I love the concept behind this poem; the wandering mind, the unharnessed and unharnessable spirit. However, I was rather puzzled by the rhythm of it. Sometimes you seem to throw off the rhythm, sometimes it's perfect iambic pentameter; it goes from free verse to blank verse to rhyming iambic back to free verse. I suppose that's something of a subjective criticism; it's not as if it's...I don't know. For some reason, it bugs me. See what other people think.

Again, the imagery and wording is fabulous. For all you have your faults with poetry (as everyone does), your ability to take an image and make it beautiful is unchanging. Lovely.

Keep writing!

~Weeba~