this is actually quite well done. some of the phrases were beautiful, such as 'cuts flesh like paper' and 'just for a moment/as if/you were human.' this was beautiful, eloquent and powerful. nicely written - keep writing.

The format for this poem is a good one. I liked the idea of the poem as well as the end that an angel could understand us humans

::Cling:: Ne, Ali, you know I absoloutley worship you, right?

Jesus Murphy! (It's an exclamation, not a person's name) That's too perfect... I'm fully impressed. I like how the lines are broken into really short thoughts, it's such a cool effect! The ending is amazing as well, that is such an intense idea and thought. Bravo!

-al