Hey there! I like your poem; I think it provides a good image with the combination of the title and the poem itself, a kind of hellish pit of all the bad emotions in the world. I like the fifth line, the repetition of the prefix "self"; you did a good job with that. The wording is good.

My only suggestions would be:

1: That you get a little creative with your lining. Throw in a couple of one-word lines! Spice it up! My sister, who is here with me, commented that she thought you should put "time, morality, and mortality" on different lines and take out the "and". I agree with her, but of course you do what you want. And we both agree tht the last word ("life") should be only one line, to make emphasis. I'm not big on ellipses in poetry.

My sister would also like to inquire as to what the word "smitches" means. As would I. Maybe it's just a word we don't know and you do and you're smart. But I think you might want to check up on that.

All in all, it's a really good poem. The imagery is good, and it sort of crowds in on you the way the figurative place is supposed to. Great job.

Keep writing!

~Weeba~