Wow, your writing is very impressive and I love your descriptions. Celeste is a very stong character and I exspect great things from her. The only thing I found troublesome was the end, I had a hard time keeping the characters straight. Otherwise, wonderful job!

I like your story, but it gets a bit jumpy at parts and hard to follow. I think if you separated dialoge by the person talking, it would make it easier to read. That one large chunk of writing in the middle is taxing on a persons eyes. Your story is very good though, the concept is interesting. Keep writing.

This is rather good, just it is hard to tell who is speaking
and who they are speaking too. You need to put some more descrption
your characters, and to your scenes.

All feedback welcome. please Read and Review.
thank u
~Selena~