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The Comic Cow 2005-03-06 ch 1,	abuseyou made a mistake. cardinals can be seen is six sylables not five.
The Juggler 42 2005-01-08 ch 1,	abuseWhat? Cardinals can be seen? SIX syllables? Unless you count cardinals as two, which is definitly stretching it. I'm just poking I'm all for correct haiku. Check out my haiku if you have time, there are only three or four. And they actualy scan right. Except for one line of one of them and I couldnt find a way to change it. See if you can spot it. Cheers!
megansafteryou 2003-12-06 ch 1,	abuseActually, it is often pronounced card-nals. So it is five syllables.
CancerianQueen 2003-08-09 ch 1,	abuseGood haiku. Keep writing, ~Naomi~
Gaeldrisan 2003-01-31 ch 1,	abuseSheesh...Now I'm going to launch into an evil parody of the Haiku Police. "Hey! This Haiku sucks! 'Cardinals' isn't 'Card-nals.' Let's flame the writer." Rude comments from other authors may not bother you, but not everyone is as frickin' rude as you are, and some would rather not have their faults pointed out so blatantly.
soyamiso 2002-11-01 ch 1,	abuselovely. i do pronounce it car-din-als.
obsidian katana 2002-09-04 ch 1,	abusepretty good haiku, but doesn't follow the haiku rules. the second line has 8 syllables(unless you say "ev'rything") and the third line has 6 syllables. that's two too many, so here's one for you: the haiku police go telling many other that they cannot count but look at their own they too can't keep seventeen hypocritical not to be mean but some of your haikus really are good.
The Good Haiku Police 2002-08-08 ch 1,	abuseGreetings from your twin! Too bad your first stab at a real haiku sucks. Ever heard of five-seven-five? DREAMING it sets of seventeen, huh? Nice, but not good enough for the GHKP salute.
Sun Chime 2002-07-29 ch 1,	abuseWow! Now THIS is the kind of stuff I really like to read. They convey so much and people can actually relate. Good!I'd like to see more of these up here.
kirsten was 2002-06-06 ch 1,	abuseLine 2 is eight syllables. Line three is 6 syllables. And excuse YOU, but where do you get off cursing people off like my VERY GOOD FRIEND Rachelle Lily? Perhaps YOU should check up your ASSES and find some courtesy among all the in there! AND haikus are supposed to be about nature. Stop cursing everybody off! That is one of the lowest things you can do. Flamers like you me off. SO SHUT UP AND GET A LIFE! ***Nestrik P.S. I know I am cursing YOU off, but YOU deserve it, not good people like Rachelle Lily.
Raspberry Ginger 2002-05-24 ch 1,	abuseOh, that one was uniteresting. I'll go read more that will make me laugh. You guys rarely disappoint in that field.
Sugars Daring Mistress 2002-03-28 ch 1,	abuseNot as funny as the others, but still good.
~gypsyQueen~ 2002-03-01 ch 1, anon.	abuseSuch poise you bestow, As others throw stones at you, Do not falter now! Heck yeah! gypsy throws hand over mouth and giggles uproariously Sorry, forgot myself for a moment! Heh... What does it matter? Gypsy's aren't exactly seen as angels... Ya' know? winks and disappears
Emily M. Hanson 2002-03-01 ch 1,	abuseHmm...very nice. For the people who think cardinal is 3 syllables, according to the Oxford American Desk Dictionary it's two -- "ka'ard/nel" (that should be an upside-down e, but that doesn't work in plain text). Also everything is 3 syllables. The prounciation key says "e'vreething." I guess the Haiku Police did their homework after all.
Fire of the Vampire 2002-02-26 ch 1,	abuseGood. Only to make people stop reviewing saying "You wrote in 5-8-6! For shame!," you could rewrite it with: Snow covers the land. Feet of white on ev'rything. Card'nals can be seen. Or something like that, anyway. But I liked it. I still wish haiku could be written as one long poem, with each stanza a different haiku, because I never could write haiku and would like to be able to. God Bless Much Love Later Daze - Kacie

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