It's good that you posted these two poems together in the same document... they seem to nicely fit well together. It seems like the first poem is remembering a lost love, and then the second one describes love coming back to you again, whether its a new love or the same one described in the first poem. Good job!

- Nika

so beautiful, sweet. both of them were nicely done. the first one was very sad but filled with this sense of i duno what it was, reality?

its amazing how you put your words nicely made.

Quite nice:) I prefer longer poems but they were both very good:) You've got some great personifications as usual.

Kormation

I loved them both! Somehow you have managed to combine despair with hope. I loved it.

Oo, kewl, I like how u said that the love was cold, and Silence had desire

(on my "don't stray far from home" , actually I think I used the wrong use of the word jade...yea...

Beautiful.. How do you do it, Andromeda? I'm jealous! (You write straight from your heart, I could see. I loved forgotten past the most. I felt the pain *if you had any*) Don't ask, I'm just too emotional. Hehe. I've read most of yours, but I'll review another.

Ooooo... Very nice. If you get A CHance you should expand on them. I'd like to see the poem that won the contest...

Huh... another couple of different peices. As to state constructive critism, I think that you probably could have made them longer... but don't get me wrong, because they were still good. Although I'm having a hard time understanding them...

short but sweet...maybe elaborate on them a bit.

Hmm...strangely profound. The first one seemed to signify a desire to forget the person who broke your heart, and the second an optimistic view of what good might come from forgetting that person. It's nice how the two fit so well together. As with the other one, I won't complain about the lengths; instead, maybe you could rewrite it and delve more into the themes. It has potential. Great job! _

EG

your poems are all so GOOD! i'm not so sure that's something i should be thanking you for, should'nt i feel threatend?...:muses on it for a while then smiles and shrugs: