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| MacKitty 2008-01-20 ch 2,  | abuseo...i like it. a LOT. you do royal well. and i realy do like the characters. stephen's so cute :D and erich is really cool. it seems like they should be cliche but they aren't for some reason (i hope that doesn't sound too rude). i can't wait to see how it goes... |
| Pixiestyxs1 2005-03-27 ch 2, | abuseOhh, I wonder what's up the Queen's sleeve. I really wish you would update this story. It has a wonderful start. |
| seilann 2004-12-31 ch 2, | abuseHmm-mm~ Not sure what to think. I did kind of guess it would be him ^_^ Well, I'm very interested in this story. I dunno if it's good or bad (I certainly don't want to offend you or anything by syaing it) but I've seen some similarities to a story of mine. Not a whole lot, but they're definitely there. So, I am going to put you on author alert. I hope you update soon! ~Chippie |
| seilann 2004-12-31 ch 1, | abuseSo far so good. I really like the imagery you use. And it's so sad! I like Erich, he already seems like a good character. Really determined. Saa, next chap... ~Chippie |
| Rivana 2004-11-06 ch 2, | abuseAw... adorable. ;-) I want more! |
| r.mai 2004-07-20 ch 2, | abuseinteresting... a lot of your stories are very, very interesting but i've noticed you haven't updated in about two years. T_T |
| Manila Keranu 2003-09-19 ch 2, | abuseooh, wirte more! I am terribly intrigued, and I want to know more... *thumbs* up* |
| Bakadesu 2003-09-14 ch 1, anon. | abuseWonderful imagery in the first paragraph. It made me want to read more, and it pulled me in. I kid you not. Wonderful, wonderful. ^_^ Please try to avoid mixing "archaic-ish" (for lack of a better word) with more normal, or modern, expressions. (e.g. "scheming wench") "smoke green eyes" - I love the imagery, but I'd use a hyphen here, it looks a little awkward otherwise. (e.g. "smoke-green"). Alternatively, you could say "smoky-green". I like the first alternative better. Again, I'd use a hyphen when describing his mother's "emerald-green eyes". It just flows more smoothly when reading it. "...certainly no less beautiful or angelic, but it's otherworldly quality diminished to a young man..." Watch the possessive form here! The possessive form of "it" would be "its". "It's" is a contraction for "it is". Hehe, I realized who Stephen was on the paragraph before the one where it was explained. These notes were made as I read the story, I apologize if they don't yield anything conclusive, but I tried. Overall, I love the imagery, it blows me away every time. I only found one instance where you overdo it: Describing Stephen. His perfection is a little overemphasized - you know? But that's just me. Maybe it's because something sinister is brewing in the future... I thoroughly enjoyed reading this story. Keep up the good work! -Bakadesu |
| The Fallen Caryatid 2003-08-04 ch 2, | abuseYay! So when are you going to post more on this? It seems interesting and I would love another chapter soon! |
| tmelange1 2002-04-21 ch 2, | abuseMarvelous! Marvelous! I see I'm going to have to put you on my Author Alert list. What do I have to do to get you to write *faster*? |
| Val Mora 2002-03-17 ch 2, | abuseThis is so wonderful!! *hugs a plushie of the limping scholar* Please continue it! |
| vbvbvb 2002-02-07 ch 2, | abuseWhy does Stephen have a cane? I'm sure you will explain later ^_~ Great story. I feel bad for Erich having to put on that brave front around others. Continue soon! |
| Yonaka no Inu-Ryuu 2002-02-04 ch 1, | abuseYAY! I saw this on your sight and read it and really liked it. I'm glad you're posting it here! |