this is another wow. i like ur stuff so much it is so verilously good. the characters are very interesting, poor charlie. i would write more but my mom is calling me away cuz i gotta go to this band thing but kudos for the story and keep up the good work.
Arrian

So well written I almost didn't notice how inaccurate the story is...I've long ago given up writing this sort of thing, no matter how fun they are, because it is very hard to write about the sort of tools the FBI has. First: why are there no forensics experts on the case? There should be some mention of fingerprints etc though I suppose that would be hard now. They should have a pretty complete catalogue of what the killer wears by finding fibers, and if not then they should be wondering about that, whether the killer wandesr around naked etc. Second: there should be some mention of all the PR nonsense going on; I'm pretty sure that at least one of a group of people on such a case would watch the news obsessively. There should also be a whole lot more nonsense dealing with the local police, and perhaps some interaction with them at crime scenes? Third: profilers can usually figure out who they're looking for within three or so incidents. I get the feeling that this is not an ordinary person and not easily profiled, but within forty-eight cases there should be a very good idea. And in addition to the forensics expert, there should be an expert profiler or two on the team. Fourth: this is simply a ridiculous amount of time for them to know so little. In forty-eight murders there had to have been at least one witness. Allowances can be made here for the supernatural. In forty-eight murders, more than this handful of people should be on the case. In forty-eight murders, the killer ought to already have a press-appelated name, rather than "The Reaper" suddenly sticking after six years with nothing to call him/her. In forty-eight murders, a human murderer would've contacted the police somehow, or started leaving messages for specific members of the team, or something. In six years, most important, someone (or more likely the FBI computers) would've made the connections with the two-year lapse thing.

One criticism of the writing: your characterization isn't particularly good. Calling anyone a "spitfire" is a bad idea on fpnet because it's cliche, for one thing. I tend to characterize too little, so take this with salt, but I think that physical descriptions should be limited strictly by plot relevance. You did fairly well on that score, but it's still a touch awkward in places.

Oh and, why the religious chapter titles? I suppose I'll find out just as soon as you post more. Keep writing!

wierdly engrossing, with a lot of focus on characterization and understanding the people, and, in it's own way, really good. i've read published novels that were worse. some creepy stuff, which might bug some people, especailly those with active imaginations, but i personally enjoyed it. thank you. ^_^

Please finish the story! I've been dying of suspense here! Pretty please w/ a cherry on top??
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Sapphire Wicca

thats such a good story!!!!!!!usually i go straight to the new hp fics but ur summery caught my eye so i clicked on ur story. Why'd u have to stop it there???????????????? moremoremoremoremore!!!!! I really like it and if u don't write more fast i'll sic my evil cats on u. (they're really evil too). please!!!!!!!!
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Sapphire Wicca