I love your story. It's amazing and so detailed.You portrayed the characters emotions so well. I loved all of it. I'm on my way to the read the sequel right now. Great story.

ohh my gosh I loved it I dont read stories like this but It caught my attention I would love to read more
Amazing story you did a awesome job :D

oh my god!! this is a brilliant story, i'm going to read the sequel as soon as i can!! cya later ~ Alenor

Fantastic story and I am no big grammar expect but I did seem a few mistakes spelling wise but otherwise than that it didn’t take away from me enjoying it very much. I know how it can be with writer’s block, I am plagued with every second of every day :P but I heading off now to read the first chapter of your sequel.

It was a great story, actually.

But, the grammar was really bad. I mean, many people have the same errors. Like using 'then' instead of 'than'.(that's one of your mistakes) And there is a huge difference between those two
words. And truthfully, it's kind of distracting.

Another is you misspelled 'private', you spelled it 'privet'.

Also, you could improve on your usage of punctuation marks.

And, you have some inconsistencies your spelling of your character's names. One examples is the half-sister of Tank.

If ever you plan on editing this story, you should improve on your grammar.

But it really had a good plot and it was a great story even if it had errors.

I am kind of disappointed that it seems like you have abandoned the sequel already. You have only put up the 1st chapter and you haven't updated since 2003. I would really love to read the sequel of this story. :)

Wow, this is really weird.
no, not the story. the story was fantastic!
I finished reading your story; teared at the end & thinking, "man, i should really leave a review"
so here i am typing away.
And im looking at the other reviews to see MY old review from last year!
[saying how i hadnt start reading yet]
ANYWAYS! WOW! i loved the story; the last part made me teared but you could have pulled the whole water work if you changed it a bit.
No..nevermind.
I liked the sweet, somewhat satisfying end

absolutely. amazing! i mean that with every fiber i possess. truly spectacular =D can you tell i loved it?

I'm just begining to read this story. Actually, i havent even read a sentence...so i'm really a begininer but I was wondering if you knew a story on this site about a girl who lives in two completely different world.
During the day..she's living in this normal, current time zone. in the U.S.
At night..she's a Egyptian..long time ago where theres a Prince..(&i forgot the name)
Yeah...Help?

hello, i have enjoyed your story so far, unfortunately i saw something that almost made me stop reading altogether
now i don't mean to be rude but the sentence"the intricacy of its -however false- religions" disturbed me and actually sorta insulted me. I respect the fact that you might believe in something completely different than the egyptians, but can't you accept that the egyptians fully believed in Ra and such? An opinion like that should be kept in ones head. Even if its not your opinion, and i fully believe it is, saying the religion is false does not pertain to the story whatsoever, so why throw it in there? I ask that you respect religions in general and please remove that part of the sentence. Thank you

Wonderful story! Will it be pulished anytime soon? A great romance story indeed.

last review for this ;)

glad ur having a sequel.
got to say that if it ended here it would've been good too.

gotta check it out now. c ya.

wait how did he remember the future?

so was one of the guides tank??

ok maybe not but will they reunite or is this gonna be a tragedy?

really nice.

good ;)

like ur pen name ;)

god.. she's changing history but why should she care right now?
i mean it really doesn't have anything to do with her. no one would know..

but she might feel guilty...

how did tank find them?

god... will she land in a pool or something??
no i doubt it...
i would be sad if she went back to her own time though...