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| Selverwulf 2008-05-13 ch 14,  | abuseFantastic story and I am no big grammar expect but I did seem a few mistakes spelling wise but otherwise than that it didn’t take away from me enjoying it very much. I know how it can be with writer’s block, I am plagued with every second of every day :P but I heading off now to read the first chapter of your sequel. |
| anitsirK 2008-05-08 ch 14, | abuseIt was a great story, actually. But, the grammar was really bad. I mean, many people have the same errors. Like using 'then' instead of 'than'.(that's one of your mistakes) And there is a huge difference between those two words. And truthfully, it's kind of distracting. Another is you misspelled 'private', you spelled it 'privet'. Also, you could improve on your usage of punctuation marks. And, you have some inconsistencies your spelling of your character's names. One examples is the half-sister of Tank. If ever you plan on editing this story, you should improve on your grammar. But it really had a good plot and it was a great story even if it had errors. I am kind of disappointed that it seems like you have abandoned the sequel already. You have only put up the 1st chapter and you haven't updated since 2003. I would really love to read the sequel of this story. :) |
| xXReader.Desu.YoXx 2008-04-18 ch 14, | abuseWow, this is really weird. no, not the story. the story was fantastic! I finished reading your story; teared at the end & thinking, "man, i should really leave a review" so here i am typing away. And im looking at the other reviews to see MY old review from last year! [saying how i hadnt start reading yet] ANYWAYS! WOW! i loved the story; the last part made me teared but you could have pulled the whole water work if you changed it a bit. No..nevermind. I liked the sweet, somewhat satisfying end |
| Samana Cay 2007-11-10 ch 14, | abuseabsolutely. amazing! i mean that with every fiber i possess. truly spectacular =D can you tell i loved it? |
| xXReader.Desu.YoXx 2007-10-08 ch 1, | abuseI'm just begining to read this story. Actually, i havent even read a sentence...so i'm really a begininer but I was wondering if you knew a story on this site about a girl who lives in two completely different world. During the day..she's living in this normal, current time zone. in the U.S. At night..she's a Egyptian..long time ago where theres a Prince..(&i forgot the name) Yeah...Help? |
| Birds and Boats 2007-07-17 ch 1, | abusehello, i have enjoyed your story so far, unfortunately i saw something that almost made me stop reading altogether now i don't mean to be rude but the sentence"the intricacy of its -however false- religions" disturbed me and actually sorta insulted me. I respect the fact that you might believe in something completely different than the egyptians, but can't you accept that the egyptians fully believed in Ra and such? An opinion like that should be kept in ones head. Even if its not your opinion, and i fully believe it is, saying the religion is false does not pertain to the story whatsoever, so why throw it in there? I ask that you respect religions in general and please remove that part of the sentence. Thank you |
| Elizabeth Anne Hamilton 2007-07-07 ch 14, | abuseWonderful story! Will it be pulished anytime soon? A great romance story indeed. |
| ski bird 2007-06-20 ch 14, anon. | abuselast review for this ;) glad ur having a sequel. got to say that if it ended here it would've been good too. gotta check it out now. c ya. |
| ski bird 2007-06-20 ch 13, anon. | abusewait how did he remember the future? so was one of the guides tank?? ok maybe not but will they reunite or is this gonna be a tragedy? really nice. |
| ski bird 2007-06-20 ch 12, anon. | abusegood ;) |
| ski bird 2007-06-20 ch 11, anon. | abuselike ur pen name ;) god.. she's changing history but why should she care right now? i mean it really doesn't have anything to do with her. no one would know.. but she might feel guilty... |
| ski bird 2007-06-20 ch 10, anon. | abusehow did tank find them? god... will she land in a pool or something?? no i doubt it... i would be sad if she went back to her own time though... |
| ski bird 2007-06-20 ch 9, anon. | abusecan't wait to find out how it ended! gosh so interesting! good work. |
| ski bird 2007-06-20 ch 8, anon. | abusegod this is swet. very original. love it ;) keep on writing!!. i would love it if u read some of my poems. can't wait to read on. ciao. |
| ski bird 2007-06-20 ch 7, anon. | abusehow did he find her? |