I really enjoyed this story! The characters, the story/plot, the whole ting. It was well written and not too slow and not too fast either. I hope they get to be together in the end

How in the HECK does a laptop work in ancient times? pathetic story telling.

I was enjoying the story until then. I'm not reading any more.

Interesting. Very interesting.

the only reason that is keeping me from tracking you down and KILLING you is that I know that there is a sequel. So help me, if they do not end up together I do NOT know what I will do to you.

WHA! Wait Tut can't fall in love with her! it will change the course of history! *shrug* oh well who cares? it's fantasy! But still!

You know something? Half way through this chapter I paused to argue with myself if it was possible for a thousand year old dead pharaoh could say 'yeah'. After much argument (I was arguing both ways with myself, its a skill trust me) I have decided that it is possible but not probable for the pharaoh to use the word 'yeah'. Because though it is deemed to be a fairly new word it might have been an old one that was recently rediscovered by modern teenagers. But it is not probable because pharaohs are supposed to keep an image which includes their way of speech.

Don't mind me. I'm just an avid debater.

Hi I really like your story. Just found it now. Actually I saw the sequel first but decided I wanted to read this first. Good decision. Sorry for not reviewing earlier I wanted to see if this was as good as I thought it was. It is so far. Great job. Just one question. How in the world does internet work if it wasn't invented yet? Maxine's internet connection must be really strong to reach thousands of years into the future.

Love this story! Please update for the sequel and great job on the story!

Peace,

Bubbly Girl

I love your story. It's amazing and so portrayed the characters emotions so well. I loved all of it. I'm on my way to the read the sequel right now. Great story.

ohh my gosh I loved it I dont read stories like this but It caught my attention I would love to read more

Amazing story you did a awesome job :D

oh my god! this is a brilliant story, i'm going to read the sequel as soon as i can! cya later Alenor

Fantastic story and I am no big grammar expect but I did seem a few mistakes spelling wise but otherwise than that it didn’t take away from me enjoying it very much. I know how it can be with writer’s block, I am plagued with every second of every day :P but I heading off now to read the first chapter of your sequel.

It was a great story, actually.

But, the grammar was really bad. I mean, many people have the same errors. Like using 'then' instead of 'than'.(that's one of your mistakes) And there is a huge difference between those two

words. And truthfully, it's kind of distracting.

Another is you misspelled 'private', you spelled it 'privet'.

Also, you could improve on your usage of punctuation marks.

And, you have some inconsistencies your spelling of your character's names. One examples is the half-sister of Tank.

If ever you plan on editing this story, you should improve on your grammar.

But it really had a good plot and it was a great story even if it had errors.

I am kind of disappointed that it seems like you have abandoned the sequel already. You have only put up the 1st chapter and you haven't updated since 2003. I would really love to read the sequel of this story. :)

Wow, this is really weird.

no, not the story. the story was fantastic!

I finished reading your story; teared at the end & thinking, "man, i should really leave a review"

so here i am typing away.

And im looking at the other reviews to see MY old review from last year!

[saying how i hadnt start reading yet]

ANYWAYS! WOW! i loved the story; the last part made me teared but you could have pulled the whole water work if you changed it a bit.

No..nevermind.

I liked the sweet, somewhat satisfying end

absolutely. amazing! i mean that with every fiber i possess. truly spectacular D can you tell i loved it?

I'm just begining to read this story. Actually, i havent even read a sentence...so i'm really a begininer but I was wondering if you knew a story on this site about a girl who lives in two completely different world.

During the day..she's living in this normal, current time zone. in the U.S.

At night..she's a Egyptian..long time ago where theres a Prince..(&i forgot the name)

Yeah...Help?