Really good stuff. The second to last sentence doesn't make sense, though. I think it's the word 'because' that's misplaced, there. Bit unfortunate, that. The last couple of sentences really seem to wrap it up, as they should. Happy writing.

A wonderful political commentary based upon the social inequieties of both today's Russian society and also of world economics. Towards the beginning it was reminiscent of 1984, Animal Farm, and Fahrenheit 451. However, it lost that feeling soon enough, because all the above three works talk about a perfect balance, at least that's maintained on the outside, while it rots on the inside. This narrative shows how it's rotting on the inside while attempting to be perfect on the outside but failing.
One small piece of advice. Proof-read. The first two paragraphs showed at least six typographical and grammatical errors.
Now to go back to the writing itself. My favorite passage(s) were about how you compared society and the narrator to an ant/bee hive with its collective thought process. It brought about that communal feel taht is required with this type of thought.
Bravo
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Tyger

Very thought provoking. The world you have described is sinister in its implications. People reduced to thoughless, mindless drones by their own apathy and stupidity. I wouldn't be shocked if our civilization ends this way...through self-destruction. Very good read, I enjoyed it.

I don't know what to say. Most stories I just skim, but you are a really great writer. I usually offer some criticism, since that is what I would like to receive, but I can think of nothing. Good Job.

I must applaud you on this incredible and thought provoking peice.
It's not often I chance to come across writing and writers that can capture
and hold my intrest through the entire peice (I'm ADD ^^;;). I like the way
that you set it into the future. you gave society a nefarious glow, and tainted
the government, but then, it was well-worked into the story. I especially
enjoyed the last few paragraphs. and the ending was (I hate to use this word...)
a zinger. off to read more of your works.
~the phoenix

I like your writing. I wish you could write more. But you take forever to update stuff. well that my two cents down the drain. Keep writing.

I make it a habit to read through the work of those who review my random scribblings, and am usually pleased to find one or two that don't restrict themselves to wonderous Dragonball Z/Harry Potter crossovers and badly written slashfics. But this... This is nothing short of /amazing/. This is better than /Red Faction/, which I know isn't technically fiction, but I've been playing for the past week and am kind of addicted to. All I can say is to keep writing along this story universe, because it is damned impressive.

this story was great. as i'm currently slowly making my way through american history, i can almost relate some of your points to the British and the Colonists. bad example, but i felt it had to be said.
your writing style is fantastic, starting out with a point that slowly leads into a bigger picture. using all the relations towards russia's past and many of the cliched ideas of our current civilization, this made a great story. definately going into my favorites.

Hi, Thanks for reviewing my short story. So I decided to read your story and give this long review about it. The beginning wasn't so interesting to me until I reached the end of the story. I definitely understood about the last paragraph where you talked abo t school and good grades, I can really relate to that. Also, I like how descriptive you are in your writing, and one thing that didn't make sense to me was the "greed" thing, I just didn't understand it.
Are you going to continue writing more or was that the end of the short story? Keep writing other stuff okay I'm putting you on my favorite author lists ;0)