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Kuraiyoshi
2007-09-08
ch 17,
abuse**. This story will forever be imprinted on my mind. How you were able to create such a beautiful story, I have no idea. I don't know what to say.. It's been awhile.
Kanilla
2007-09-08
ch 17,
abuseLet me thank you.

I've had the lovliest evening for some time now, just spending the hours reading this utterly breath taking and beautiful story. I'm not ashamed to say I've cried too.
Creating characters that feel real is the trick, and you master the trick very well. So, thank you, I've enjoyed myself.
Raimon and Alesso's story is the peak of tragedy, and I really do believe tragedies are the most beautiful and powerful of love stories.

-Kanilla
dolly-dear
2007-03-24
ch 18,
abuseThe ending is unbearingly sad and sweet, and it breaks my heart. Poor Alesso.. I had almost hoped i would be a happy tending.
urban kitsch
2007-01-03
ch 18,
abuseI love how your words flow together in ways that it seems they were meant to be and how you can capture such subtle and evasive emotions so truly. The people in this story aren't just characters--they're reflections of the greatest lovers that have ever existed.

It's beautiful.
PhotographedTuesday
2007-01-01
ch 18,
abuseOh, wow. That's all I can manage to say. I read all of this in one sitting; addicted the moment I skimmed the summary. Brilliant job. Excellent. This should be published.

The story of Alesso and RaĆ­mon are without a doubt the exact thing I was in the mood to read. Very passionate. Very angsty. Very romantic.

As for Fabrizio's Story, I'll most definitely be looking into it.
0ri
2006-10-09
ch 17,
abuseThat was... so... terribly... sad. I've been reading this without stopping and I just got it done. This story made me cry. That takes a lot of talent...

I really loved Alesso's bold character. ...I can't believe he died. This story actually makes me relent Catholicism even more then I already do.

This story was really amazing. I want to point out something else, too - the writing style. Really unique, and it captivated me completely, from start to finish. I don't read many things on this site; but I think this story is definitely an inspiration to get reading into more stories on here.
Drazuki
2006-06-21
ch 18,
abuse::makes a strangling gesture towards author::

OKay, I know I should have been more prepared because of the blalant "this is not a happy story" declaration, but I most certainly wasn't expecting that. (But no expects the Spanish Inquisition!)

Damn you, I almost started to cry! (Which is saying something, because I never cry over something like this). The spanish was a little awkward for me, thankfully I knew most of it (corazon was a little weird since the only endearment I know is querida)

Anyway, I love the characters (though a few got what was coming and a few more need to get it far quicker). Your writing is very styled and very easy to understand and love. (I sitll want to strangle you though.)

Anyway, I hope you continue writing, and not just boring ol' essays. Those have no entertainment value whatsoever.

Yeah...so...hm...

Write on!-KT
ddz008
2006-04-02
ch 18,
abuseGreat story!The story was right from the beginning... it was a beautiful one but with such a sad ending.I love it, you made a good job with this. Thanks for sharing the story with us! :D
Wallpaper
2006-03-26
ch 18,
abuseOh my, oh my...I think i cried a bucketful of tears at that.

The story...i wouldn't say that i was an enjoyable read, but i must say that the ending couldn't have been better.

The reason i feel that i've been so affected by this story is not because i'm a hopeless romantic (though it DID contribute a little in it...) but by the fact that it was so...real.

I loved the fact that you didn't romanticize it, like maybe Alesso didn't return back to the ** trade after Raimon left for the monastry because he loved him too much to sell his body to another, but instead, he had to give in to the greater powers of society and went back to his childhood trade to survive. There are many more aspects to the story which moved me and made me cry, but i think that the best part of it was the realisticness of it.

Also, what could have the story been if not for your writing? At the last part of the story, where Raimon wrote of his final months with Alesso, you made us overjoyed at their happiness, but also aware that it was not going to last longer. But you kept us clasping our hands and not wanting the knife to drop until the last moment when it did, you totally changed the knife into a noose, with Alesso dying in place of Raimon.

I loved your story, and i hate to dissect this story more. It speaks for itself, and i will always remember it.

Now...for another story! Fabrizio's Story!
D.H. L'Orange
2005-12-30
ch 17,
abusewow. this was just amazing. your characters were so real, and the ending was just so... bleak. i absolutely loved this story.

: )

DH
American Schokolade
2005-12-24
ch 17,
abuseThis was a wonderful story. Very tragic. Reminds me somehow of Shakespeare with less poetry, more slash, and not nearly as dryly exhausting. So, in other words, it doesn't remind me of Shakespeare at all, but at this ungodly hour (which happens to be 10:41 pm, 41 minutes past my bedtime on Christmas Eve), I am unable to think of a proper allusion. I won't try, don't worry.

I think you should have set this story in an all-out fantasy world, perhaps with a religion similar but not quite the same as Christianity. The kind-of-but-not-really historical fiction is a little--how shall I say it?--ugh, this is going to sound really demeaning, but don't take it that way: it seems a little half-assed. Keep in mind, I mean that with every good feeling I have. It's just that, with a story like this, I think you should take the all-or-nothing approach.

But, whatever, I don't know why I'm knitpicking, because it really didn't bother me, or detract from the actual story at all. And that was the -only- thing that didn't quite sit right.

So, back on track, I am really impressed with this story. You did a great job handling what could have been soap-opera type situations; you strayed just close enough to the annoying my-past-is-so-awful-feel-sorry-for-me effect, without venturing into it; and you brought to life a romance between two characters that might not have been likeable if you had been an immature writer. Because of all that, I applaud you. Such is a rarity on this site, and it's refreshing.
alianne_erinae
2005-12-20
ch 18, anon.
abusewow...this was such a deep and moving story...very well done!
Kimberly
2005-12-19
ch 17, anon.
abuseI'm rendered speechless by the absolute power of this story...I don't know what else to say except that it was beautiful, even in the deep sadness of it's ending.
Peace
2005-12-16
ch 1, anon.
abuseI just wanted to say that this is really a wonderful story; beautifully written. It... It renders me speechless, it really does. I love it. Thank you so much for putting it up somewhere for people to read.

It's so beautiful.
Anon
2005-11-20
ch 18, anon.
abuseSpectacular. It has all the components of an enjoyable story. I love your style and powerful word choice. The plot was enganging and bitter sweet. I even let out a few tears! The whole thing flowed like an aged melody and the characters were well written.

Looking forward to more of your work.
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