Reviews for Neverland: Forsaken Dreamscape

Reviews For: Neverland: Forsaken Dreamscape - Reviews: Page 1 of 25

McShortShort 2008-07-23 ch 32,	abusei LOVE this story
Elly 2008-06-14 ch 32, anon.	abuseOk. Really. All I have to say: story, sweetheart. Though I do confess that I (regretfully) haven't read the actual Barrie version, I do LOVE the story of Peter Pan. Yet, the fact that you took the boy who never grows up and actually made him, well, GROW UP could upset a few. You know the type; the hardcore "fundamentalistic" Pan-antics who demand that the integrity of the essential concept of Peter Pan, aka eternal boyhood, be kept holy. (No, I am not one of them, obviously. And No offense or bitterness intended to the fundamentalistc Pan-atics.) But of course, this is the beauty of "fan fiction" no? -To give your own take on a story? Though I do hesitate to use the word "fan fiction" in regards to your Neverland. I just think it's gorgeous. The syntax and diction seem to parallel everything I've known about Peter Pan (as little as it may be) and it's not rushed, or underdeveloped, unlike many unpublished original fiction. Your characters are strong and bold. There are no "useless" scenes or dialog. But I must say. Either I'm extremely dim-witted, or that twist- the one with Peter being Hook and Hook being dead and Peter being Nibs and Nibs being dead, but in actuality Peter was Nibs and the demon was Peter- was brilliant. And not just for my sake, I'd like to say it was the latter. Throughout the story, it was one of those things where, you, the reader (I, the reader...?) WANT SO BAD for Peter and Wendy to just be together, because that's just HOW IT IS, you know? But then, the reader is just like," Damn. What is it with me wanting bloody NIBS in the bloody picture?" &then you just look at Peter and go," wtf, Peter, why are you such a narc?" And then, somehow, without it being overtly deus ex machina, it all works out. It was amazing, really. I never actually suspected. I mean, I got the hints and whatnot, but it never really pieced together for me, until you know, it was actually revealed. Anyway. I just meant to say "Hey. Thanks for writing this. It was effing brilliant." So. Hey. Thanks for writing this. It was effing brilliant. Off to read your other ones. -Elly
Okoto 2008-03-27 ch 32,	abuseI just finished this story. It was amazing, you're way of description, story line and twists is amazing. I really respect your writings so much. You can really connect with the feelings of your characters and sympathize with them at the right times.
Carla 2008-03-10 ch 32, anon.	abuseI loved it. There isn't anything for me to say because, well, this left me speechless. Well done!
Written 2008-03-04 ch 32,	abuseI started reading this AGES ago. I thought you would never finish it, but here we are, at the finish. Your stories are a bit more morbid than anything I usually touch (well, not really. I recall enjoying quite a few of your works back in the day), but loving Peter Pan as much as I do, I decided to read it to the end, and I'm glad I did. You are awesome. I think you really brought out the spirit of the book, in your own way. I don't know if you've read it, but you've really done it justice, and then some. lovely work!
John Michael Christopher 2008-02-23 ch 32,	abuseI think that's the best story I've read on this site.
John Michael Christopher 2008-02-22 ch 19,	abuseIn addition to how well you integrate the elements of Peter Pan into this story and how the liberties you've taken with these characters somehow don't even seem to be liberties at all, I love how these characters are all so strong. When the story begins, and there are so few of them besides Wendy, she still comes through every time. Her weaknesses are her strengths, and she's true to herself without being annoyingly naive. Self reliance goes a long way in showing true character (people at their best when things are at their worst and whatnot), and you do an amazing job of developing not just Wendy, but also Nibs, Tiger Lily, Curly, Tootles... I can't believe to the extent you've developed each of them. And these aren't even original characters to begin with. They are strong individuals, but even more than that I like how Wendy must still rely on the support and rescue of her friends. There's a human dynamic here that I think you illustrate to perfection. They are excellent together. More than that, they need each other's love and acceptance to function. Mach's internal struggle is a great example, and it's subtle. It's the one that really made me stop to appreciate it, as you seem to follow the complicated triangles with Wendy, Peter, Nibs, and Tiger Lily. The scene in this chapter where the reunited Lost Boys are asked to actually share their toughts with each other after isolating themselves for so long is also particularly telling. And well executed. You also do not disappoint with the bloody action. Pan's shadow, the croc, the mermaid, the fire bear, Tiger Lily's rescue, the Vorks, the crossing. Nibs and Wendy's shadows. I guess I was bound to like this story. Sex, violence, rock n' roll.
kasey 2008-02-18 ch 32, anon.	abuseBeautifully written story! I just stayed up until 5 in the morning on a school night to read this. xD The only thing that I would have liked to see is like, what the mental hospital people thought of it all at the end. but wonderful! you are an amazing writer!
gracielou54 2008-02-17 ch 32,	abuseYou captivate me with your stories, and i really REALLY hope you get published. Write more because you brilliant at it. :D
VictorianRed 2008-02-11 ch 32, anon.	abuseWow... I loved your story, at first I was skeptical and just started to read it b/c at the time I really had nothing better to do but as I got along with it I found I started to really enjoy it. I thought this would be another silly fanfiction (it was a little strange to find it on fictionpress since it's technically fanfiction)( by the way, it's REALLY hard to find good original ones these days) but you suprized me with you writing skills and amazing use of plot line. Awsome job! Can't wait to read something else from you. ;D
Betha K. Cameron 2008-02-09 ch 32,	abuseabsolutely incredible, thats all i can say.
John Michael Christopher 2008-02-08 ch 2,	abuseWow. Now this is what I call a Peter Pan story. I'd disagree that Wendy seems normal. To me, she reads as though she really does belong in the asylum with the other patients. But that's not a criticism. That's just me disagreeing with certain characters who are already quite fond her. Excellent use of the Peter Pan mythos. I'll definitely be reading more of this.
Drucilla Black 2008-01-06 ch 32, anon.	abuseSuch a beautiful and fantastic story. Not to mention, so many twists that kept me on my toes. You truly are a talented writer, regardless of what the people who rejected your novel think.
terracannon876 2007-12-04 ch 1,	abuseEven though I have never read Peter Pan nor watched it, I chose to read this story, and I am very glad I did. It is a very complete story, with very complete characters and plot and such. I liked how I could guess at what the original personalities were like (as they were like in the book), although that wasn't a major part. I also liked seeing how they had changed and their "new" selves. I also liked the whole POV issue and how no one knows the whole story, not even the one behind it. In fact, you gave rise to a few plot bunnies of my own =_= My only criticism for now (as if I'm going to review again later...?) is that sometimes the quotations or actions are not clear. "He" is used without a name defining it, so that I have to guess who it is by what the person is saying. It occurs once or twice, but enough to catch my attention. Oh well. Good job on the story =D Thanks for posting it and letting us read it and writing it in the first place =3
Kirai no Kumori 2007-12-01 ch 32,	abuseWell, I'm sad to see it end. Twas great while it lasted, although I do think that you rushed those last couple chapters just a tad ^^ I think you should have done a couple more chapters - drawn it out a bit more, but it was still a very good read ^^

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