 RoseLife 2007-09-24 . chapter 1Wow! lol many questions! XD
haha but i loved it! it was so sweet and cute =P
I loved the bit at the end where he plays that song for her and tells her how he feels! so warm and fuzzy! XD
In my opinion the title is awsome! it fits the story well =D
You so should add those interesting facts into the story! but it was a great piece! well done and keep it up!XD
~RL~ |
 Phoenix-ofthe-Goldenrose 2006-07-05 . chapter 1This is such a sweet story...I can definitely identify with it. Music is pretty much my life, though not as much as Kate. Sometimes I put off things that are important becase I have to create music. Not quite like Kate, because I'm one of those strange people who wants to be an opera singer...but still kinda similar! I love Evan! He's so...well, I mean, he's awesome! The only thing I would say, is maybe explain a little of those interesting facts in the story. Maybe not fully explain, but maybe say, "Angie fiddled with the radio, and only got static. Kate wondered if Angie was nervous or something, because she knew the radio hadn't worked for the past ten years." I don't know. Just a random suggestion. Keep up the great writing! |
 Mrdarcylover 2006-05-26 . chapter 1I enjoyed this, it was good. I think the title does fit, and I don't think any scenes need cutting out. I liked the end, it was cute. |
 goddess of yesterday 2006-05-13 . chapter 1That was awsome really hope you continue. I seriously cant wait for more, this is the first fiction press story I read and I really liked it, I hope the rest are as good as this. Update soon, don't keep me hanging. |
 Rosie Seifuku 2003-04-22 . chapter 2suggestions:
character definition comes from interaction. have them interact with each other more, like doesnt kate see them in school before graduation? u could go into normal life, cuz kate does have it there too.
define kate's morals more. if she's passionate about music, PROVE IT. i got the idea she likes to write by her devotion, but the scene where she talks about not learning anything new breathes passion.
what is the plan, exactly? can u spell it out some more? more detail is needed to certain issues.
thats what i have for you. good luck! |
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