aww, this is so cute. i feel a little bit lost, but it's really cool nonetheless. you should add on to it = ]

Ur a great writer. I've really enjoyed reading ur stuff.

I enjoyed the story. Although there were some parts of it that were a bit confusing. I think it's because there was some missing action between each part - if you know what I mean. It would make a great story if you ever expand upon it. Possibly add some more background information and bring the reader into the plot. But otherwise, good job and keep on writing. I'm going to go check out your other stuff. :)
And if you have time, I'd appreciate if you would read my chapter story and review it. There's something about it that's kind of off, but I can't really place my finger on it.

Ohhhh...I liked it, but i think you're a/n were as amusing as the story. I think you're right about not getting to know the characters very well and It'd be really cool if you expanded it into a longer, more detailed story explaining more about the power of purity etc, but I REALLY liked it anyway so don't think I'm putting it down in anyway. Your writing has a very natural feel to it that is nice to read..good job. ~Ing

Good idea for a story but it is a little rushed. Details!!! Please continue.