...nice...

I really like vampires and things, but wow, this is... again words fail me. sorry i can't describe how i feel about this one!

that was weird, but hey, i like vamps! check out my vamp fics if you've the time. oh, BTW, JRR TOLKIEN RULES! GO GANDALF!

i agree with shiro*tenshi, expand your was of describing things and it'll be even better, and yea talk about their lives beforehand.

Eeep! Scary story ((Jk)) Can i be the girl who gets her face ripped off? heh. Have you tried typing into microsoft word? It fixes a lot of typo's.

Hi there! Interesting story, I assume you will continue, yet there are some improvements you should consider! 1) sleeve is spelled liked sleeve, not sleve, though that could have been a type-o! 2) together is spelled like together, not togeather. 3) You should have described the killings more, but you had some pretty good descriptions about characters, though you should expand on their lifestyles! 4) The vampires are too obvious and they live among humans, so they should be in incognito or dress a bit like humans. 5) Cara should be labeled as a human before she gets killed and perhaps you should have an introduction describing their lives like the trites about vampires, lifestyle, other crap! Well, maybe you should expand on this and consider my evaluation. The ending was kinda weird and maybe it should have been more of a cliffhanger. Well, hope you improve! Ciao!

awsome story seph. keep writing it. maybe?