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| Priscilla1 2002-03-06 ch 1,  | abuseAhhh, so sad and romantic! Well, twin, you did it again, you made me cry and at work no less! I loved the poignancy of having Jisatsu finally getting the courage to profess his love only to see his beloved die. The supreme sacrifice on Daen's part to willingly make sure Jisatsu lived while knowing her own life was doomed was beautifully done. I so love your writing because it's so evocative and the descriptions are so vivid. I hope to be online osmetime soon so we can chat! |
| Falasade 2002-03-03 ch 1, anon. | abuseBravo, I was not expecting the story to end so quickly, but I have to admit I am impressed. I'm not a great fan of depressing endings, but I am a fan of well writen stories. I think you where a little to attached to his eyes, but other then that you did a great job. You do a good job with emotion, but your descriptions were a little shallow but it fits with the mood (who's looking at scenery when your lover's dead right?) Anyway, I just wanted to congradulate you on a job well done. ~Falasade |