you know what? this was extremely short and could have been written into a long, descriptive story and usually i'm usually less partial to those types of stories that are so rushed but i actually liked this one. it was like a story, really. it was more like a memory being told in short as the one that holds the memory doesnt want to go into all the long details of what had happened... ha, this sounds so gay but u_u but your story is good stuff and peash out

now that alomst made me cry. very good.

ooh - sad n depressin - but left with a vague sense of hope at the end - me only hav one critiscm though - me thinkies that you ran through it a bit quick - i think you should have made the thoughts and feelings of the girl more pronounced and the love she has for the man more vibrant - otherwise this was good =) ~Damia~

I like how your story is to the point. It was very nicely written as well. Great job! ^_^

*sob* sadddd...*sniffle* what were you talking about? it's not bad at all!!!! 'tis quite good, actually!