That was the most horrible story I have ever read. It was absolutely disgusting!

MY THOUGHTS:
1) "This Chapter Contains Subjects Dealing With Rape"
>>> Bring it on. I'm a big girl..
2) "He had been shot in the thigh and blood began rushing from the wound"
>>> Hoo hoo hoo... *gets excited*
3) One question though.. why didn't the 2 of them exit the house? *reads on*
4) And you wanna know another thing I find cool? Your bold-italics. There aren't many people who uses that in their stories. I, personally, find it easier to read in there are some contrast in the stories...
5) "He slipped of my panties and I felt his hands feel over my **."
>>>> EEEEWWWWWWW!!!!!! (but I'm lovin' it! I like stories that are just a 8teensy* bit racy. Not hardcore **, mind you. Just a dash of sex. (although nothing should ever happen. Oh, I am SO Disney. :-P ))
6) "My mind went numb as he thrust his ** in and out, groaing in the process."
>>>> EEEEEEEEEEWEWWWWWW!!!! EEEEEEEEEEWEWWWWWW!!!! EEEEEEEEEEWEWWWWWW!!!! ( I probably sound like a 4 year old, but rape is stupid. If you HAVE to do a crime, might as well rob a bank or something. Then at least you get money. If you rape someone, you get thrown in jail, and you don't get **.)
8) "I wasn't sure whether to feel happy for getting some dick or whether to feel bad for getting raped. "
>>>Uhm... the latter, of course. You can get dick anywhere. If it was any easier to get, it'd grow on trees.
9) ", and wiped the sticky goo from his **."
>>>>Eww eww eww!
10) " I realized that I, too, had gotten an ** in rape."
>>> It's not Rae's fault. It's the whole body-reaction thing. Doesn't make it right.
11) "The trial for me "murdering" him was innocent."
>>>????? It was self-defence!! HE was in HER house, and the gun was HIS!!! :-O

Afterthought: Cool story! I will definitely check out your other stories when I have the time! :-D You're an excellent writer. And kudos for making use of bold-italics. And your paragraphing is good too. So, I give this story a rare 5/5. Congrats!

-Textie, the fussy (and happy) reviewer)

LoL thanks for the amazing reviews, Text. No this one isnt very gorey, but I'm starting a story (inspired by yours) that is gonna be full of torture, gore, and all the good icky stuff. I've only got the into going on but I'm working on it as we speak. I'm sure u'll like it =D

MY THOUGHTS:
1) I know it's kinda late, but it just occured to me that your writing is quite good. :-D Smarter than your average bear.
2) "It was the way it made you fear for your life that really scared you."
>>>Yeah. Not that I'm saying I dun believe in ghosts & the supernatural, but I fear man more. Man can do the most brutal damage...
3) "I could and head butted him in the groin"
>>> Always the weak spot. *sigh* (Cool though. Painful, but cool)

Afterthought: Cool... I've read so many chapters! Usually my staying power is only for about 3 chapters..

-textie

MY THOUGHTS:
1) Oooo... sorry for the formatting of Chapter 1's review. I SO hate bad formatting, so it doubly sucks when MY piece is not formatted properly. Dontcha just HAte it when the words are all over the place?? *kvetches*
2) "Nothing's wrong. I'm just..kinda hungry."
>>> Hungry for food, I hope, and not pu.... koffkoff...
3) "Damion stood there, a demon-like look planted on his face, holding a silver pistol at me."
>>>> Cooo-hoo-hooo-hoooolllll!!! :-D I love the suspense of it all!!

Afterthought: Niiiice.... but remember the kid, Rae. Very good. Textie is pleased. :-D (More gore in the following chapters, I hope.)

MY THOUGHTS:
1) Thanks for reviewing TIER and HOT LIKE FIRE. This story

has a fetching summary, and I'm a fool for online love myself, so

this kinda hit close to home for me. :-P Let's see what's going on,

eh? ;-P *reads on silently*
2) "My only friends are online and although this may seem

somewhat pathetic, i don't mind it."
>>>Hmmm... I have about the same number of online friends as

real friends (ie: not many). That's probably coz I'm the same

person online as in real life. Pathetic, yes, but WHO ASKED

YOU??? (Heh heh. Kidding. :-P)
3) "He typed back a smiley face"
>>> I have grown dependent on emoticons. Especially in Yahoo

messenger, the emoticons are all cute. I find myself making

emoticon-faces even in real life. Like, "Wow, that's so cool! Colon,

dash, close-bracket." Heh heh. (Now I know why I'm single. Heh

heh)
4) " The conversation held between us went until about 3 hours"
>>> For me, sometimes even 5 hours is not enough. But strangely,

5 hours in school seems like an eternity!!! Heh heh..
5) "I told my new friend my name and my address and welcomed

him to come over anytime"
>>> Okay, that was just ASKING for trouble...which is why I just

talk to people a billion miles away from me. ;-) (And then I kvetch

about having him so far away. I sabotage myself, really.)
6) "I logged off and let Angel play her Neopets game."
>>> My kid sis LOVES Neopets. :-P
7) "subconsciously"
>>Yeah, you got it right. :-D
8) "Sorry, but I have to study. I have this huge exam tomorrow and

I can't afford to fail it."
>>> Ie: "Go away kid, You bother me!" Heh heh. :-P
9) "unaudible"
>>> Inaudible.
10) "I silently scolded myself for even thinking of his good-looks at

a time like this."
>>> Yeah, psychopathic killers can be cute too. heh heh. (And I

bet Rae's like, "Oh, kill me baby one more time, killah..." heh heh.

Idiot me.)
11) ""So, Damion, what do you wanna do?"
>>>> *winkwink* I leave that up to you.... heh heh. (I am SUCH

a perv)
12) "I'm not some jerk, trying to get into your pants"
>>> A gentleman, then, trying to get into your pants????

Afterthought: Quite good. Better than most. I give this chapter 4/5. Let's go to the next chapter then...

-Textie, the fussy reviewer

sooo what happened to the wound in his thigh?

i like how ranae is always trying to protect angel. it's a good story!

I like it so far! If I was in Ranae's place though I'd kick him. The window? What weirdo would come two hours early thrugh a window and play with your sister? hehe, I can't wait till the next chapter!

Keep up the good work!

that was good, but guns dont go "pop" they're REALLY LOUD!!!! I liked it though

I liked it a lot, but you might want to change the rating. The content is a bit mature for PG-13.

Wow...amazing ending to an amazing story.Keep up the wonderful writing.

short but I'm still lovin it.Add more soon!

Another amazing story! I'm dying to know what happens....no pun intended of course.Very suspenseful and well written not to mention you carry the storyline at a perfect pace.Keep up the wonderful writing.