Nyo!
I know that I already reviewed but I actually went through the whole thing. But there is one thing that must ask... Do I know Applebee-sempai? I think I do... That just made it funny for me. You do need to go back over what you've written and make sure that you are saying what you mean or, perhaps more accurately, what you want... Yeah, you need to fix that.
~~TaigaSama

Oh Lordess...
Vulnerable instead of venerable (The second one means incredably old)
Prevented instead of permitted
ughh, it's really good but you should go back and make sure that it's saying what you want it to say, 'kay?
~~TaigaSama

Hmmm....hhhhhmmmm...good good....very long...but good...must write more....look at my pretty dots...O.O I actually like this story, it's quiet interesting, even if everyone stricks me as an **...O.o....tee-hee...Anyways! ^-^ this is a great story! creative super-hero-chick thing! not complaining, i mean come on, who doesn't like that sort of thing? O.O *shuts up* yes...alright, i'll go before you take out a death-ray or something and shot the living ** out of me! ja-ne mi amiga! *waves*