Oh my god... in 5th grade, I seriously had a story exactly like this, only with different characters...
I will post it soon, so you can see what it was like, after I rewrite it, considering I wrote it in 5th grade!

Just one thing. As loserzunite mentioned, this is for original stories. Try "w.FanFiction.net" the sister site to this to write FanFiction, but otherwise, a good story.

Ok, i read it, and... sorry to say, it wasn't exactly the best story I've ever read (if you know what I mean...) but it's your first story, so you did okay. Keep writing.

Ok, i just read the first paragraph (I know, i should read the whole thing) and i just wanted to say, that when you said "which shot at the city below" and then immediately said "the city was destroyed" that kinda was bad. You should've tried to say stuff like (ex. "a slow flame hit the end of one building, and slowly crept on and on, from building and building until the entire city was destroyed." or maybe even more detail. Dunno, i'll just go read the rest of it.

i didn't reaf all of this because i got bored. make the first chapter more interesting PLEASE. Also duh all the characters are your's because this is an original fiction sight.

Hey, great story idea, i'm gonna read your revised version cause, no offense, this one needed work. I really like it, good idea, good story plot, but it needs more explanation and descriptions. hope you work on the better one soon.

Great eneding, I love how it all tied in and Zair came back. I really like this story and I do hope you do a sequel. It was a good story and I really likes the characters. I wish there was more to the characters that explained more about their behavior, what kind of relationship did they all share before the story started. It just starts with them as friends and it progresses. Maybe you could put it in the sequel or something. Anyway, again great story.

Lisa says sequal yes! Write a sequel, or more Red Silk. Or really ANYTHING but just UPDATE ALREADY! BAKA!

2nd to last chapter and a good thing too because I'm running out of cliche ways to say good job. It's like 11 at night and my brain is fried. Oh well. Good job. Buh bye!

Making up for lost time again. Yeah. Anyway. Love the story as usual, kind of obvious when you consider the fact that I actually ahve it saved on my computer. Yeah. Um...I'm gonna go now, before I embarrass myself anymore.

As usual good job Michi and keep up the good work even though this story is already finished and now I'm just kinda making up for lost time. Oops -_-;

Yes I need to review more get off my back. Well stories to review and such. TTYL!

I think your chapters could be more longer and more descriptive. Usually, in any type of story, the chapters are at least a page long, not a paragraph, silly. XD Also, this is a website for ORIGINAL stories only. Not fan fictions! If you want to write fan fictions, go on another website. X.X I don't mean to sound harsh, even though I probably am, but I'm a honest critic, so take it or leave it. XD

Other than your mistakes, I think your talent has some quality. Just spice up your plot a little. X.X

not bad, not bad at all. ^_^

This is a good concept, and well written. However, I would like to hear more. How do Morai and Kal know they're friends when Morai evidently just met Kal in the first chapter? Maybe there could be a backstory, of how Morai, Kal, Zephon and Zair all knew eachother before, so that the whole friendship thing would be better explained. Why does Kal feel so strongly about Zair's death and Zephon not? Losing a good pupil and colleague is probably just as bad as losing a good colleague in the case of Kal. Please explain.

Note: I only want to hear more because I'm interested. You have good characters and a good concept. Please keep going, and tell me more!