okay i can't keep my mouth shut for any longer. i warn you there will be a lot of criticism below, however this is not a flame but a genuine desire to help improve your story.

okay so my main conern is:
exactly what sort of boat are they on that can survive the open ocean but only be steered by one person... and has sails?!

even from my own limited experiance on boats (5 days on a tall ship, one of the genuine olden day boats needing 50 peeps to man) i know that even if the vessel is mainly electronically controlled there still needs to be more than 4 people on boad (and with only one person actually doing something? wouldn't work at all)

one person couldn't possibly control an oceanic ship all by him/herself:
would need teams to haul on ropes, climb rigging to furl(close) sails, etc. especially in rough weather

morning tasks would usually include:
deck(s) would be washed every day to stop from rotting, brass possibly polished every day too (ie. portholes, bells, etc.),

crew:
need a captain, navigator, bosun(engineer/carpenter/jack-of-all-trades), plus general weight to haul on ropes
there needs to be a team on night watch (unless anchored and then only 1 person)

im pretty sure that ocean-going vessels aren't actually called boats, but ships (however im not 100% positive about this one)


story points:
Steve has pretty much no reaction to being on the boat: to make more realistic he might get sea-sick or merely have trouble adjusting to swaying of boat

they would be a weather radar that would be constantly updated and they would have had notice of the hurricane coming... however you could say that this notice came at night and, while moving away as fast as they could, would still have trouble avoiding all of it

you don't really mention anything that gives atmosphere incdicating they are actually living on a boat:
eg. waves coming over the side of the boat (which would happen in a brisk breeze or travelling fast) and you make no mention of tacking what-so-ever

so basically the question you need to ask is: what sort of ship is it exactly? you don't mention a name, whether it has sails or is driven by an engine or anything

however aside from this boating knowledge, i am enjoying your story. i like they way your characters interact and while your descriptions may need a little work they still portray a very vivid image

never stop writing
(^>) Eleri (^

Great chapter! The summer before I went to college, my brother and I worked together - rode to work and back and everything. We were very close and I was so upset when I had to leave at the end of the summer. He left for work before I got a chance to say goodbye, so I actually drove the 30 minutes to his job and said goodbye!

I like it when authors write about close sibling relationships. I think they are healthy, not weird. I have 3 brothers and a sister and we are all very close even though we are now grown up and have families of our own.

haha. that was so cute :D
they're back together AND steve's not dead!

NO HE DID NOT DIE!

lol. my school they let you take alg2 as a freshmen, but you had to take the other classes in jr.high. so i took alg2 as a freshman and im taking precalc. now.

omg haha i love her song

interesting :D

Hm, not bad, but I can't say that this enthralled me. The "He's gone!" part was a little underdone, as was the reunion... You write excellent character development scenes, but your action left a lot to be desired.
So, overall this was ok, but not my favourite.
Erisah

heya, even with bits missing from the story this was a brilliant piece of work. i was so upset when steve fell overboard, i honestly thought you were killing him off. ahh well, cya later ~ ALenor.ps: sorry for bugging you with all those reviews about missing bits :)

ok, there's something seriously screwy with some of the chapters of this story! why is it mucked up i'm wondering? ahh well, this chappie, 26, is also incomplete ~ Alenor.

this chapter, 21, isn't complete...sorry

i take it back, it's only chapters 13, 14, 15 and 16 that are incomplete. is it possible to read them in their entirety? cya ~ Alenor.

heya, this is a great story so far but there seems to be a problem with the story that starts when steve goes into her room at the apparent end of this chappie. all the chappies have been cut short from her onwards so yeah, i'm wondering if you have a completed version of the story that i could read somewhere? cos it's a great story so far and i want to read it in its entirety. cya later ~ Alenor.

hi. okay. well i just read your "authors note" for the first time. i haven't really had time to be reading on fictionpress but i had some time today so i stopped by and i was sort of hoping you'd have something new up. i'm not angry with you for not or anything, i just want you to know, everyone is their own worst critic. even though you think some of this older stuff is crap or unrealistic, the truth is, i started reading this story when i was maybe thirteen and for some reason it just made me feel a lot better about life in genearl. not that i can exactly 100% relate to summer or any of the characters but just because it was a teenage girl unsure and then she found happiness eventually. even if you feel like this sort of writing doesn't ring true to you, i just wanted you to know that it does to some people and taking it off the site would be truly upsetting. also, although sometimes the plots are a little teenage-angst-ridden-full (i'm not sure what word would describe that), your writing style is really quite good. i've probably read a thousand or more novels in my life and out of all of those very different novels, yours is one of the simplest but most satisfying to read. i understand that college has made you stressed out and you're not writing now but i hope you will one day use your talent to write something you can be proud of (and then of course, send me a copy since i'll probably love it).

your faithful reader, through thick and thin-Caitlin Marie

Hey, I just came across your story today and I think it is really interesting. When I got up to chapter 13, it wouldn't show the entire chapter. I skipped ahead a little and it did the same thing for chapters 14, 15, 16, 21, 26. I know that it has been a while since you wrote this story and you are currentlt taking a break from writing, but I was wondering if you had some time that you could fix this so I continue reading this story that I'm really enjoying. Thanks!!