this story is rly good, good job, i really liked it
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please

this story was so pathetic. seriously, go through it and actually develop a storyline rather piecing chapters together by a thread.

I LOVED THIS STORY!

i like your story very much, but it seems slightly unbelivable in terms of continuity. sort of like...how does seth get shot 9 times and almost die and then have the strength to go running home from school right after? or how does kristen get beat up so badly that you say that she almost dies, and then manage to get up and run away after? and random characters grab her arm a lot, and she doesn't seem to feel the pain...cuts take a while to heal and all.
but other than the continuty issue, good job, it's an interesting story.

I really honestly didnt like this to much. It is very *boring* and is way to close together.

Keep writing, i started JUST like this :)

Eeeewwwww!!! This made me wince and shudder and all that. That is just awful. I could really picture the disgustingness of it. God. You are a good writer, but that is not a pleasant subject to write about. Nevertheless it's not something we can hide from in society, so I am glad that there is someone willing to write it and post it online! Will keep on reading when I have time.

The story was decent, even though the style of the writing was childish. I liked your plot a lot, but the ending reminded me of a bad romance movie. Anyways, keep writing... I'll be checking for the next story.

wow,thanx for finishing the story!!!I'm soo glad you did!!!

Well her father became a better man...I should've said something about her mom being pregnant and all....*sigh* Oh well. Just pretend like it said that her mom wasn't pregnant after all!

This was a good story. I enjoyed reading it. But what about Kristen's family situation? You never really said anything about that.

I'm glad Seth's dad got what was coming to him. Jerk.

aaaaaaaaaaaw *hugz sam* that was great hun, very dramatic, very affective and very good
*gives you a lollipop* :p great work, i updated my story too.. its in my username brokendagger .. chao

wow you have no idea how long I waited for this chapter!Thank you for at last putting up chapter 18

Holy Crap. My heart was pounding at the last paragraph. But one question, wouldnt Seth of heard his father talking? I assume he was too focused of his mother to hear it. Eh, just wondering.

Ack! You can't leave me in suspense...Continue soon please.

continue, please!