Interesting at least. Hard to really say where it's going, it being so short. Could have some potential.

Was neat seeing the lady refered to as King instead of Queen. Some societies did do that I believe even when the King was female. Neat to see something different yet just rare, not unheard of.

Yes, yes, yes! Continue it, I love the potential this has! :-)

I really know nothing abou Highlanders, so I can't quite review your fanfiction in that department. =/

This is an interesting beginning, albeit short. I'm a tad bedazzled by mentionings of things that I have no clue of, though. But it probably is a setting thing, and all fantasy books that use original settings have this effect on me.

Just a little thing here: The dress’ ragged remains sat on the floor. She’d cut it off without a care for the material. She tilted her head, glancing at the dwarf called Asreal.

A bit too many shes, here. Maybe try combining sentences and rephrase as:

The dress' ragged remains sat on the floor, cut off by her hand that cared not for the material. She tilted her head...

I _do_ not believe that noone has reviewed this story!!!!!!!!!! Oh well, that just means that I'll be the first of a great line of followers!! MUWHAHAHAHAH! I love this story!!!!!! *hugs* you're doing a great job hun, don't let those mean people who read and never review cause their jealous *breathes deeply* Ruin your story!!!!! It's really good, and if it was in my power I would force the population of the world to read and review!!! Just because I would! Cause it's great, and I mean it! Oh, BTW, this is Rorie, not Phee, there are two of us (NO I DO NOT HAVE SPLIT PERSONALITIES, THAT'S JUST WHAT THE MEN IN THE WHITE ROBES SAY!!!!!!) Good luck with the rest of it, toodles!!!!1 *scurries away to eat chocolate chip cookies with jelly-bears on top*