I really liked the story. I liked that you referred to the passing of time in a unique way.

My only suggestion for change is right at the begining when Kellen is describing his thieving and you end the paragraph with "But I'm jumping ahead of myself" and then proceed to say what he's doing in the present, which really feels far more like jumping ahead, then what was previously being described.

Wow. I couldn't stop reading. I hope you win the contest =D

I think A Thief's Tale is a great short story and that Kellan seems such a lively character. I loved the way it just all fitted and liked your use of description.

Ah~~ this was a fun, refreshing read. Like I said, it has a fairy tale charm and a sweet quality that shines from the writing. Your original stuff is beautiful, as can be expected from your fanfiction. I'm looking forward to see more of both!

Excellent story! Absolutely well made. Those loopholes... ya don't really notice them when you are so caught up in the story, but good you pointed them out. Are you continuing the story? You definitely should!
The Legend Master

That was cool! Love it! Yea, Kellan is a cool character. The plot is really well developed. You obviously had it all worked out from the start, the characters, the plot ,everything. Godo story! Keep writing!

This here sucked me in from the very first page! I loved it!

Kellan is AWESOME!

i like it, how bout a nother one coz the story aint really finished, theres still a war to be fought and princesses to be kissed.

Good! I liked it a lot! ^_^ You should write more fantasy stuff..but make sure you finish the Weiss Ken-centric first! ^_^

That was AWESOME!!!! I just loved it! I really got into it, and the characters were great! You are a really good writer!! I'm gonna put this on my favorites!

That was sssssssssssooooooooooooooooo good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I loved the way Kellan had to get used to the royalty (spelled wrong) =)

I like it. A possible explanation for the princess understanding when the duke didn't might be because he had already explained to her that he was a theif. The princess seems just a tad Mary-Sue at the beginning--possibly because the narrator is so quick to explain away any suggestion of bad traits. But then, I guess that's an in-character thing for Kellan to do.

ohhh...this was good!!! There needs to be a sequl!! ^-^ Good job!!