That's amazing. The line "the song is over" is an incredibly powerful metaphor.

"A wave of shocking silence
carries me away"

It's wonderful, dark and descriptive. I don't know what else to say. You've perfectly captured something as complex as death in seventeen syllables. Keep writing!

short and too the point but not lacking the nessacery desprictions

depressing reallybut i am addicted to this

(hah. if i tried to speak to you in german, you would be crying out of laughter

really now, no need to have a mess up over that. gaga, crazy, whatever. just made me laugh)

Mm. I love the haiku's. I wrote like 1 Haiku, and it sucked..

beautiful.

"a wave of shocking silence" -- that's exactly what I feel when I hear about someone I know who's died.

most people i know can't write a haiku to save their life, at least not a good one, yet you manage to pull it off

JA~

PS that is DARK, next time capitilize the summary

Ugh, this hits close to home...sorry, this is a bit hard for me to review. You've perfectly captured the essence of death...grief...sorry. This is...you're amazing. Sorry if this review makes little sense.
~lyv

Beautiful stuff.
So simple to see what you mean, yet very moving all the same...

Simple, but i guess very realistic! good on you!

hiya! cool,
it makes me picture just a silent crowd. i'm wrong, aren't i?! o well, better luck next time! good haiku!
cya =)



-winged girl

You're a goth, aren't you?

Good, breathtaking.

That's a really strange way of dying. Mystifying images form in your head. Beautiful.

WOW...and, um...more WOW!

i love this, would you mind if i printed it out (with your name on of course) to stick on my bedroom wall?