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a silenced revolution 2007-03-18 . chapter 1
That's amazing. The line "the song is over" is an incredibly powerful metaphor.

"A wave of shocking silence
carries me away"

It's wonderful, dark and descriptive. I don't know what else to say. You've perfectly captured something as complex as death in seventeen syllables. Keep writing!
Morwain 2006-05-03 . chapter 1
short and too the point but not lacking the nessacery desprictions
Aquafied 2006-04-30 . chapter 1
depressing reallybut i am addicted to this

(hah. if i tried to speak to you in german, you would be crying out of laughter

really now, no need to have a mess up over that. gaga, crazy, whatever. just made me laugh)
Kusje 2006-04-30 . chapter 1
Mm. I love the haiku's. I wrote like 1 Haiku, and it sucked..
boys kiss girls 2006-04-29 . chapter 1
beautiful.
SinCorazon 2006-04-07 . chapter 1
"a wave of shocking silence" -- that's exactly what I feel when I hear about someone I know who's died.
Loup17 2005-04-11 . chapter 1
most people i know can't write a haiku to save their life, at least not a good one, yet you manage to pull it off

JA~

PS that is DARK, next time capitilize the summary
godawful teen-angst poetry 2004-01-15 . chapter 1
Ugh, this hits close to home...sorry, this is a bit hard for me to review. You've perfectly captured the essence of death...grief...sorry. This is...you're amazing. Sorry if this review makes little sense.
~lyv
Tatterdemalion 2003-11-15 . chapter 1
Beautiful stuff.
So simple to see what you mean, yet very moving all the same...
Indecisive 2003-11-09 . chapter 1
Simple, but i guess very realistic! good on you!
Emi Amara 2003-11-08 . chapter 1
hiya! cool,
it makes me picture just a silent crowd. i'm wrong, aren't i?! o well, better luck next time! good haiku!
cya =)



-winged girl
agny 2003-11-08 . chapter 1
You're a goth, aren't you?
frugale 2003-11-07 . chapter 1
Good, breathtaking.
Sun Chime 2003-08-09 . chapter 1
That's a really strange way of dying. Mystifying images form in your head. Beautiful.
greenfroggies 2003-07-08 . chapter 1
WOW...and, um...more WOW!

i love this, would you mind if i printed it out (with your name on of course) to stick on my bedroom wall?
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