  dropped by package 2005-10-25 . chapter 7 Theres a story which is similar to yours (silent girl due to some past happenings). You should check it out. It's a Korean drama name "Spring Day". I think the idea is very good but I believe you could have made a book out of it if you have longer chapters and more description to everything. Take things slow. Enjoy the journey as you aim for the destination. Take cares... |
| P.M. 2005-06-15 . chapter 6 Not Bad, but could use more chapters, but you were probably getting bored with it or something else. Good job. Bye. |
| emerald 2005-04-27 . chapter 7 motherhood at nineteen?! whoa isn't that a bit too early? i really like the plot...but the characters don't seem well-developed...you never said why akito wanted to help her-maybe he has a good past and wants to make sure she has a good future...i mean you need to add details and more emotions...i like the characters but they just seem a bit empty...didn't mean it like a flame but just giving my opinions... |
  Ayumiko 2005-03-05 . chapter 7I really loved it, but really, it should have been much longer! ^_^ |
| JMT 2005-02-24 . chapter 7 Sorry, but this was probably the stupidest story I have ever read. It was way short and to perfect. There was no conflict or plot line. What you put in 7 chapters should be in one. Maybe it could be improved. Add some meat to it's bones. |
 forbiddenfantasy 2004-06-24 . chapter 7A very cute story! Very nice for a light read. Read it in one go! Good job!! |
 Minyaithwen 2004-06-09 . chapter 7aW! it was so cute! You might want to add some more discussion. I know it's hard because she' signaling, but I think that it might help improve your story. Great job! Toodles! |
 Tsurai Sana 2002-09-27 . chapter 1Yay!!! This was good so far so Imma keep reading! ^_^ onward to the next chappie!!!!
~Tsurai |
 Kes 2002-08-29 . chapter 7OMG, this is so touching! I love your writing, I can't wait to read more ^-^ You're so talented. My only serious fics turn into strange things like kitties having cold water poured on them and turning into old fat guys o.o' I hope you write a series two; this story seems awesome so far! Keep up the good work,
~Kes |
 Aishi-Cc 2002-05-21 . chapter 7Write more! You can't end it there! WAHAAAAAAAAAAA
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAaaaaaaaaaaaa! I want more! |
| Aishi-Cc 2002-05-21 . chapter 6 No over! You make Aisha sad! |
| Aishi-Cc 2002-05-21 . chapter 5 Ture Ture. Teenagers in love. |
| Aishi-Cc 2002-05-21 . chapter 4 This is so sweet! |
| Aishi-Cc 2002-05-21 . chapter 3 That was sooo sad.=;_;= |
| Aishi-Cc 2002-05-21 . chapter 2 I'm glad the story wasn't over |
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