Hmm... Pretty good! I don't know, the second and last lines bother me just a tad... I think it's because I want to add a "my" before "father's" in both lines. Other than that, however, good job! I'd like to see more poems from you in the future, if at all possible.

i like this, i think it should be a little longer or something, it has you somewhat yearning for more. the theme is a little fuzy, but i guess thats good because it gets the reader's mind to think and wander and see where it can take it. please R&R my poem!

nice, the words paint a very clear picture, v. nice.

I like! Very expressive. Short, but the words tell so much. Hehe...I'm watching "The Dead Poets' Society"...how appropriate, huh?