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| SexySesshieSama 2006-03-23 ch 8,  | abuseWow...liked the ending! And...there was more i had to say, sorry I forgot. Can't wait for more! |
| SexySesshieSama 2006-03-23 ch 7, | abuseYou need to spell check your words, and also, the name Kyle seems so...so...common. It doesn't fit him at all. Something more...interesting would do better, even if that name was a bit common too. Just a little thing that's bothering me. |
| SexySesshieSama 2006-03-22 ch 6, | abuseJade needs some help. I love how you're doing Joshua's accent. Blaise did deserve to die! Hatred... |
| SexySesshieSama 2006-03-22 ch 5, | abuseBlaise is a traitor and a sellout. Nicholas just has problems. No offense, but you could use an editor. Not to be mean, but it would help a lot. Keep it in mind. |
| too lazy to signin SexySess... 2006-03-22 ch 4, anon. | abuseThat was gnarly and disgusting. I would like to see some longer paragraphs. (eww! My dog just sneezed on my pants! LOL sorry for the nasty randomness). Timmy is cool, Gabriel sexy, Blaise nyeh, and Francesca interesting. Jade is pretty cool. |
| SexySesshieSama 2006-03-20 ch 3, | abuseThat flashback was, I think, well done; corniness (not a word!) is expected in children and very realistic. Oh, is it just me, or does he not remember the past? Hehehe, this should get pretty interesting... |
| SexySesshieSama 2006-03-20 ch 2, | abuseOnce again, a bit corny, you say "powers" too much in a row at one point, and when it's corny it seems to me like it lacks originality. Also, you spelled kindergarten horribly wrong. Timmy is really interesting, sick and twisted, reminding me in some ways of some of my friends and myself, minus the finding rape hilarious. Gabriel is a really cool character, and the bisexuality and homosexuality only proves to heighten my interest, because of who I am and how I see life. All in all I know I forgot some things, but I think you get the gist; funny, but could use some improvement. |
| SexySesshieSama 2006-03-20 ch 1, | abuseOMG! Wow, that ending was pretty cool, pulling me in, making me want to read more. Parts of this chapter were a bit corny, with the whole "Without you/her the world would..." whatever. It could be a bit more subtle, slightly less old-fashioned cartoonish. Other than that it was well-written and interesting. And do I detect a hint of history we do not yet know of? Inriguing... |
| Leshia Water Nymph 2004-03-12 ch 8, | abuseI really like this story so far. It has great description and I love how you leave that last suspensful sentence at the end of each chapter to make the reader want to continue. Please write more on this, I'm dying to read it. |
| WithTheFunk 2003-10-21 ch 4, anon. | abuseme again..i really liked it but you rushed it some. |
| WithTheFunk 2003-10-21 ch 1, anon. | abusei only read the first page but it seems like a weirds cross between animorphs and mindwarp |
| Lady of the Meadow 2003-09-19 ch 8, anon. | abuseOh! this story is quite funny, you need to write more! ^-^ i have a few friends who are bi. they are actually realy pritty and funny and no one gives 'em anything for it coz they're realy cool ppl. well, when you write more i'll be sure to be there reading it. ~*~ Lady of the Meadow ~*~ |
| Kaze-Shukun 2003-06-01 ch 8, | abuseHye, pretty nice story here. Like it, continue soon! |
| Neoxiph 2002-11-20 ch 1, anon. | abuseThis story is great! Please continue! This fic has become one of my fav. P.S. This is the first time I have seen a fic with my name in it! Gabriel. If you don't mind, Could you make not an amnesia struck fool the entire story? Oh, and thanks for NOT making his gay. That would have ruined the story! Keep writing! |
| Kimberly L. Williams 2001-11-10 ch 8, | abuseWow. Great story. Love it! Write more, please!!! |