Mm it does read a bit stutter-ish (if that sentence alone makes any sense whatsoever, hehe), but I like this bit :

They tell me in a quite

Anti-Homeric fashion that

Your eyes were clear

Intense Blue (midnight dark)

And who said to be great-

You had to be Blind?

No, Emerson, like every

Tyrant and blue-eyed Lover-

You only must be

Misunderstood

oy i hate you. *laughs* but take it in a great way :)

Kind of hard to read...