Hey, thanks for reviewing my story 'Black Unicorn.' Allow me to apologise for the short chapters. I assure you, there is a reason for them (other than my extreme laziness.) The following chapters will be longer, although I'm not very good at updating regularly. I was wondering if you could give me a bit of extra feedback. "the chapters after the prologue dissapointed me" - Could you tell me what it was that disappointed you? The reason I ask is I'm working on a re-write, so I'm very open to suggestions for improvement. If you could get back to me, that would be great!

Anyway... I'm loving your poem. The short lines create a feeling of rising panic. The repetition of "why did you leave me" is very poignent. Great work.

Very nice sounds straight from the heart. Leaves you feeling sad after you read it.

Rocky

Love it Jedzi-sama... though I've heardyou tell it to me many times befor, and you must hvae been sad, what else could have you writing osmething like that, but then again I shouldn't be talking =P

Tana-chan

I agree.It does have a depressing sound to it(but then again so does my stuff)So dont take this as rag but to it kinda sounds like one of those "new age" poems.You know what I mean (I hope)But for your first it's pretty good

You guess you were sad? I'd have to agree. It has a really sad tone, but I like it.