this is good, but really depressing. I like it!

I think you've managed to capture the feeling of despair here very well. It's short and to the point and I find it to be quite effective. And I point this out because it always seems to jump out at me, because I personally try to avoid it, but your sentences have a sort of repetive step by step feel to them sometimes. "She did this...She went there....She etc..". Not really a big deal, but it's something I look for in my own writing. Still a very nice piece of writing.

Niiice! You must continue! Now!! ^_~

~Lillychan